This is the first piece of my work...hope you gonna enjoying reading it.
Samaru's Tale
Book One: The half way of Adventure
I will tell you the story of an Dunmer called Samaru,who's born in Eagle Moor and his adventures in Morrowind, I won't make long forwords, I will tell you now his Tale.
Samaru was a Spellsword, he could swung a sword and form spells, so he went away from his home with a group of adventurers. These adventurers, the Redguards Dinah and Monsey, the Bosmer Tarhie and the Khajiit Ri'Sirr, weren't we kind of an friendly group, but they were the only ones which needed a sort of Mage and Samaru was good at magic at all,so they choose him.
They went to the north to Oondril. Some kilometres behind Eagle Moor our story begans,right there at the hills...
"Samaru,come on. I know that you aren't fast as us,but a bit of endurance you should have." Dinah shouted. Samaru was so exhausted that he only wanted to lay down and take a nap, his steel Armor was heavy and all this ampullas and scrolls he carried in his bag were heavy,too. He backed on his sword. "Couldn't we rest here for a while, I'll need to recover." He said gasping. "You know the art of alchemy,don't you have a potion for such a situation?" asked Tarhie,who just wanted to shot an arrow in the head of the dunmer so that they could travel much faster. "A Potion for such a situation? Here is only grass? I can't make a potion of grass!" Samaru yelled. "Okay,we will rest...and after that,we shouldn't run...remember my friends, wizards aren't that fast." said Monsey, she was the leader of the group,and she was a warrior like none. Ri'sirr sat down on a rock and got his skooma-pipe out of his bag. "You're the only Khajiit I know,who is not a slave,but you were,now you enjoy skooma and moon sugar...you know that this is illegal." "Many People have Moon Sugar in their houses and we Khajiit like the soft taste of it and the good feeling." "I've tasted it one time...neither i'll do again." said Dinah laughing, in the following silence only the wind and the hard breath of Samaru could been heard. "...Our Battlemage should sleep to recover." meant Tarhie with a big smile. "I'm not a Battlemage...I'm a Spellsword!" shouted Samaru."Oh, I'm sorry about that really bad mistake." said Tarhie with an hyperbolical voice. "So,our little friend searches conflict. That is another example that Bosmer are rough folk with not so much competence..." said Ri'sirr loudly. "YOU!" yelled Tarhie...so the sun went down on the far horizon and night came...
Before the sun had bagan to rise, Monsey had waked up the group. "Wake up! Wake up,you lazy dogs! I want to reach Oondril fast. I want to sleep in a bed and I...don't want to hear your snoring again! Move on! Move on!" that was how she minded to wake them up. It was a really actual technique. So they left their camp. "how 'bout a little song...I mean...a song that makes us more awake." Samaru suggested. "What song do you mind of?" asked Dinah interested
"Slow,Slow we go to the mountains far away,hey ho,heey hey
Slow,slow away the clouds gather hey, hey ho hey,heey hey hey
Faster,faster we move,still there is darkness hey ho hey,hee hey ho hey
Sun is rising fast and now we stand in her light. hey hey hey ho hey jo
Over the hills we go, hey hey hey,hey hodi hey
Still there is much breath in us and now let us sing hey hodi hey,hey hey hey hey heeeeyyy
hodidi Hey!..."
The song was still going on,they all knew it and so they all sang it. At late Morning they reached the brigde. "Over there are the Trandel Plains. I think we will reach Oondril before night." said Ri'Sirr. "No rest today..." was the only thing Monsey had to to say to this. After a few minutes of walking Tarhie looked at the side and stood still. "what is,mr. elven-eye?" Monsey said with a laugh. "There is a cave." Tarhie said,"A guarded Cave." "Guarded Cave means slaves,or treasure or...an mad Guy who wants to be alone...whatever...let's see whats in there."
The guard weared a compled Steel Armor,an Iron Tower-Shield and an Imperial Broadsword. Before the guard was knowing what was going on, he had an arrow in his head and an bolt in his chest. "My Arrow killed him!" said Tarhie proudly."It was my bolt!" said Ri'sirr angry. "It doesn't matter...let's get into the cave." Dinah said an moved swiftly down. He was a adventurer,wearing a bonemold Armor and carrying an magic Silver Claymore, so we others thought it would be good that he would be the first who should enter the cave,they would be right behind him. It was dark in the cave, Ri'Sirr, Samaru and Monsey light up their torches and Dinah drew his sword. They moved slowly and watched the walls of the cave. A queasy feeling came upon them. Then they heard a noise. "Gimme' the meat you coward!" It was a really obliquity voice. They all looked to Tarhie. "The Khajiit can sneak better." he said. "...this is your turn...move.." The Bosmer sighed and began to move slowly and quietly. At the end of the tunnel there was a hole, in the middle of it was a fire, two goblins and a Man in a Robe sat there,Tarhie looked down. Dead ones, Knights,Adventurers, Warriors and other trampers. "poor fools..." he whispered. When he band his Bow. "The man,the...let's say the ears..." When he shot, the man in the robe fell to the ground. It was like the guard, one Arrow in the Head of one goblin, another in the neck of the second. "Okay,the area is clear." Tarhie shouted. The others came to him. "are you mad? In the deep ways of this cavern there could be still more of those...goblins? What business have Goblins here?" Samaru looked at Tarhie. "I don't know, they are brainless little monsters..." In the time of their conversation the others had found a chest. "Ok...Ri'Sirr?" The Khajiit understood. He took out a probe an deactivatet a trap,that could been there. Then he took an skeleton key an opened the chest and in of it,there was Gold,Diamonds,Emeralds,rubies. They took much they could bear,when they heard a cry and they saw a goblin-Chief..."Uh-Oh..." Monsey whispered."RUN!!" She cried and they jumped out of the hole and ran out of the cave. The Goblins were still behind them. They ran fast but the Goblins came nearer. "Ok...ATTACK!" Yelled Monsey and the group turned. Samaru unleashed an Ice-Ball and Tarhie shot his arrows. The rest fight face to face with the goblins. Monsey's Sword,an Iron Longsword, swung around and smashed the head of a goblin,and when it cut another into two parts. The group fighted hard and they noticed that the goblins weren't so many. After a little time of fight the adventurers won the battle and moved again on the road to Oondril. "Damn...what are we going to do after we were in Oondril?" asked Tarhie irritated. "We will travel to the capitel of Morrowind, Mournhold." Said Monsey loudly and proudly. "Oh yeah...I wanted to see the city of Almalexia long before...but now...why should we go to an city of an Daedra? An DAEDRA...",that was Tarhie's Opinion of Daedra, for him each daedra was an evil mindless creature. "We know you're thinking my...friend,but...it is the next biggest city to the emerald Forest." said Ri'Sirr. "Ok...but I will kill the first High Ordinator I will see." "You...kill an...High Ordinator?" they all looked at Tarhie and began to laugh. It was like madness to say something like that. So they went on and soon they saw it Oondril. "A pretty place...we will wait until morning,then our real journey will began." said Monsey with a smile on her face. "Ah yes...this is Oondril...I thought it is bigger." meant Dinah, all did that, only Samaru had seen it before. "...For my part,the size is not important, but it is of importance that we gather ourselves and get us new stuff and food." "..and a pack Guar!" Tarhie interposted. "A pack Guar?...do you think we would get a pack guar here...and do you think an Guar would help us?" meant Monsey. "The Bosmer's always right...trust him or his great power will crash us." Ri'sirr said with a laughter. Oondril was only a town,not a great city, but they found what they needed. So the day went on,nothing important happenend. Morning came. They packed their causes and moved out of the city. "Next city is the city of Almalexia and the capital of whole Morrowind,Mournhold...we'll take the eastern road until we reach the second river,we will cross it an move through the woods and climb the mountains...it is the shortest way to Mournhold." explained Monsey, Samaru sighed,"It is the hardest way,in the forests are wolfs and other creatures,I've heard Storys in Oondril that a Vampire lives in the mountains and Werewolves are in the forests and maybe there are more dreadful and more evil creatures..." As they moved they discussed if they should take the road or the "shortcut",as Monsey called it.They moved the road until they reached a second river. "Ok Monsey...we'll go your way...if we are in Mournhold before a week passed...or longer...we'll never take this way again,ok?" said Tarhie as he looked at the mountains that they could see from the wide way. "Another mile. Let's go." They moved of the road,straight south-east. In the forest they defeated some Wolfs,bears and some other creatures like Kwama's.
Before they reached the the mountains the second night was moving on after they left Oondril. Ri'sirr smoked some Skooma, Tarhie watched the woods from a big tree and the rest was sitting towards a fire and singing songs like "Nerevar oh saver of Dunmeri" or "The song of dunmerish houses" and after a time they felt asleep...
a roar in the deep darkness of the forest woke them up they drew they weapons and looked into the darkness that surrounded them. A panting in the blackness..."Werewolves...as I said..." Samaru whispired, his voice was full of fear. And when...a big wolf creature came out of the shadows,the claws covered with blood and the teeth waxen as bones,the eyes of it were focussed on them and then it jumped at them with an roar.Monsey could bring her sword curtly between her and the beast,she goes down to the ground. Two more Werewolves jumped at Tarhie and Samaru, one of them ran as fast in the forest as he came but burning. The other one lost an eye as Tarhie shot at him. The biggest one,that was the one that attacked Monsey was nearly going to bite her head off but Dinha smashed his hilt in the beast and both fighted the creature. Right in this time another Werewolf attacked Ri'sirr and bit his arm. Samaru stang a bound sword into the head of it. But the other two came back and attacked Ri'Sirr,tarhie and Samaru again. They fought hard as they could until Dinah choped the head of the wolf leader off and the other both hasted away...
"We need to move fast,They will come back soon...this creatures are adamantine." Monsey said with a deep breath. They took what they needed and began to climb the mountains...
End of Book One
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Sorry no-one has gotten to this yet. It's a very interesting story. There are a number of grammatical errors throughout, but I'm sure we can smooth it out a bit.
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im likeing this alot, not to much of a writer myself, more on the practical side of things, but it's a very intriguing story, i look forward to reading the rest.
also, i didn't mind the grammatical errors or the odd spelling mistake here, (so long as they get edited of the final draft) becasue i can't type propperly at the best of times. (that and my 'm' key doesn't work properly.)
so, nice work Alean.
also, i didn't mind the grammatical errors or the odd spelling mistake here, (so long as they get edited of the final draft) becasue i can't type propperly at the best of times. (that and my 'm' key doesn't work properly.)
so, nice work Alean.
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So, after about an half year waiting...here's book two, I'm not really fast,but i promise book three before christmas ^^
Book Two: Vampires and other undead
It was a hard way and the wind was getting cold. It was like summer would change to winter in a few hours,the mountains were high and the air was cool. After hours Samaru looked down,the land was so beautiful,he thought. After long hours,the group reached the top of the mountain. "That was nice...the mountain could be bigger..." meant Ri'Sirr with an smile to the others,which looked really exhausted.Monsey watched him a bit evil. "Shut up,Khajiit,if you're gonna feeling better when us my sword will bring you back to the ground of reality." Ri'Sirr understood,she was a "bit" shirty of those werewolves and right after that climbing a mountain,not many do like such things. But after a few seconds,the group moved down on the other side of the mountain. There was another forest,Tarhie felt like he was home. Samaru wondered how many trees are growing in Morrowind,in Vvardenfell,there is no forest. They walked through the wood,killed a few wolves and things like that until they reached he next mountains,but as they climbed,they saw an huge dwemerish Tower,they all looked up to it,there was an open Gate,right in the mountain."The home of the vampire,we should get away from it,we're lucky that it is day." "Shut up Samaru, I wonder if there is really a vampire,I decide...we kill this vampire,we'll become heroes." Monsey said proudly,but not too loud,maybe the vampire had an light sleep.
The darkness overwhelmed. There was no light,no machine worked in the dark channel,they all had been destroyed. As they got deeper into the structure the structure,they moved across a brigde. Samaru looked down and...down there were moving some skeletons,the group turned to the end of the Bridge,there stood an woman,an vampire. "Welcome to the masters home,he sent me to make sure you will keep quite,he wants to sleep.",she said with an wonderful sound of a voice,her face was bleached and nearly white,the theets were even whiter. "...so my servants are going to kill you." she added. Ri'Sirr smiled,"Good,so we don't become vampires." Tarhie moved an arrow to his bow,Samaru,Dinah and Monsey drew their swords. Ri'sirr,he took his crossbow. "aww...isn't it sweet when the kids want to defend themselves against the masters punishment." That was the last thing the vampire Lady said before she headed into the darkness,zombies and skeletons were heading from both sides of the bridge. A dozen of each. Monsey sighed,"One good thing...we don't need to fight a vampire,too...um...ok...ATTACK!" Loud yelling the group ran into the undead at the side where the vampire has had headed away. It weren't enough to stop them. They just smashed the undead before they could react. Ri'sirr and Tarhie shot the Skeletons and Zombies on the over side,then they headed to their group. In the dark there was a roaring. Three Lame Corpruses slowly walked towards them. "by Akatosh...Corprus-creatures...Tarhie,Ri'sirr...shoot 'em." Tarhie shot his Bow twice,but the Arrows didn't seem to hurt the lame cropruses really. "Damn...I hate fighting against those..." samaru sighed,then he spined with his arms an spoke a spell. He threw a mighty Fireball at the creatures an they fell to the ground. "Wow...good to have a magician with us..." meant Ri'sirr at this mess. "'kay...now we'll get the vampires."
The deep darkness of the cavern shrouded the sight of the five adventurers,but another Spell of Samaru gave them a bit of light. "Ok...for my part Vampires are Creatures of the night and of the darkness...we could defeat them outside." meant Tarhie. "We need to face him where he awaits us...Or do you want to tell your Child's a story where sun finished him?",said Dinah smiling. "N-no...I would lie to them." "Oh,this is nice to hear...you woodelves even lie to your children." Ri'sirr laughed,while Tarhie grumbled a bit. When they came into a Chamber where bright Torches where burning. On a sacrophagus sat the vampire Lady. „Oh! You came...this far? You know that there's Nothing here for you,mere mortals. I shouldn't have even thought that you' have killed his lower servants,you won't...have a chance to come to...HIM!!“ With that she jumped to the ground and drew her sword. Before the adventurers could react the vampire-lady was close to them. „Die!“ She said and jerked her sword in Dinah's Stomach,but the steel armor held most of the damage off. „Dinah!“ shouted Monsey,she drew her Sword and beat the vampire. Monsey scared up. Under the Robe was an iron Armor...Monsey stepped a metre away and watched the vampire-lady's Head coming nearer the neck of Dinah. Before the teeths could gouge into the throat,Dinah did a fast Strike through the stomach of the vampiress. He jumped forwards,so Tarhie and Ri'Sirr had a clear sight for their ranged attacks. The bolts and Arrows crushed into the armor of the female Vampire. She screamed loud and ran to the Khajiit. Before she reached him, a Firball,casted by Samaru, hit her properly and she got down to the ground. The vampiress didn't thought that this fight would be that difficult. She stood up and turned around. Her sword crossed the one of Monsey. „You mere humans cannot win against me!“ „We'll see.“ smiled monsey and gave her an hard clout, right after that,she turned around and cutted the head off.
„Only a huge speak...no great fighting. Those Vampires are so...“,said Dinah but before he could end his speech pointed him to stop. „Keep quite. This vampire said something about an...how did she call him...master?...Whatever,I'll think we should take this creature down and take some treasure,if there is kind of treasure in here.“
The group got only slowly forwards, in the following corridors were many zombies. The group fought their way through the ranks of the undead until they came into another chamber.
Samaru sat down,he couldn't even walk anymore and his arms, they were like paralyzed after all this fighting. Same for the other members. „Damn...that were many and I heard even more. Gosh,hope they won't get us like this.“ Samaru said with a small smile on his face. Monsey looked at him grimly. „Hm...we're never unprepared Samaru and...I don't think they have still enough of their brains to open a door.“ „Right,think positive...undead are dangerous,but not very clever. Hehe,exept of Vampires and all of those higher kind.“,grinned Tarhie. „We'll rest here for an half hour,after this...we'll take them down.“ Monsey ordered, „Tarhie, Sirr,how's your ammunition?“ „I only got twelve arrows...and our Cat here seems to be out of bolts. Neither he got a meelee weapon.Hehe.“ Ri'Sirr smiled. „Keep quiet,my Claws are sharper then you think.“
Monsey watched both and when she looked to Samaru. „When we go,you won't go to hand-to-hand fight, you'll support us with your magic. Dinah and I will do the fighting part...and Sirr will too. But look in every chest we'll find, maybe we gonna find some bolts in there,and for Tarhie maybe more arrows.“
The rest was really short for them,esspecially Samaru,he never had walked that much in such short time with an bonemold armor on. „After surviving this, I'll join the mage guild and go to Cyrodiil. Whole day studies and no more adventures.“ „Yeah,after this. But for now,you are working with us,that means whole day combats and small rests like that. Get up,we have some beasts to slay.“
And again they fought their they through the corridors,it was kind of easy for them,slaying those slow zombies. After all they came in a really dark corridor,even the torches didn't made a clear sight. A creaking in the darkness. They made themselves again ready for battle. „Maybe skeletons...“ A Silouette formed in the dark and then. „DAEDROTH!“ Yelled Dinah as a fireball felled him. „DINAH!“ Monsey shouted,she couldn't believe what had just happened. „Close Combat,don't let one of thus firbeballs get you!“
The rest of the group got Hand-to-Hand. The Creature was really strong and smashed Ri'sirr against a wall, nearly chopped Tarhies Head off and ripped nearly Samaru's right Arm. For Monsey's unlucky part, the creature had bitten of her left hand.
„Not looking good...“ was her comment as she bit herself in the lip. „I hate...those...daedra...“ was Tarhies comment to all this...A Plan was needed,a good plan,or they all died in that cave...
In the darkness behind them,there was Dinah...and a shadow who seemed to kiss his neck...or something else? Dinah's Skin became paled and his his eyes got red...“Come on my child. Help those mortals and get them to me,join the family of Aundae...join my family.“ The evil smile on the creatures Face began to grow. „I'll wait for you in the last Chamber of the last corridor,deep under the earth...“ The creature said as it moved into the shadows. Dinah stood up,taking his sword. „Yes. I will.“ he said grimmly and moved slowly forwards.
The creature screamed in anger and smashed Samaru to the ground. His Ironsword was broken,his armor couldn't stand another hit. The creatures jaw came fast nearer.
The Bidenhander of Dinah cracked the skull of the beast and it walked back. „You'll die for that wound,Daedra.“ He said and beat the creature again,it fell to ground and disappeared in red dust.
„Dinah? You...You are alive?“ Monsey looked at him happily. „Yep. I'm okay but there's no time to talk. We should get rid of this monster who owns this cave. Tarhie,you should get Ri'sirr out of this. You two are useless now.“ „What! Dinah,what are you saying?“ mumbered Tarhie,baling his fists. „You two are good at range. You're out of ammo and in the coming darkness we don't need you and for another point.“ „ Ri'Sirr is badly wounded, you wait for us outside,we can't risk the life of us all because one is wounded.“ added Monsey. „Okay...But end this fast.“ Said Tarhie and took the unconscious Khajiit. „Good luck.“ he said and moved through the bit of Light of the dungeon. The rest of the group began the last step of this little adventure...and at the end,maybe their last.
End of Book two
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Book Two: Vampires and other undead
It was a hard way and the wind was getting cold. It was like summer would change to winter in a few hours,the mountains were high and the air was cool. After hours Samaru looked down,the land was so beautiful,he thought. After long hours,the group reached the top of the mountain. "That was nice...the mountain could be bigger..." meant Ri'Sirr with an smile to the others,which looked really exhausted.Monsey watched him a bit evil. "Shut up,Khajiit,if you're gonna feeling better when us my sword will bring you back to the ground of reality." Ri'Sirr understood,she was a "bit" shirty of those werewolves and right after that climbing a mountain,not many do like such things. But after a few seconds,the group moved down on the other side of the mountain. There was another forest,Tarhie felt like he was home. Samaru wondered how many trees are growing in Morrowind,in Vvardenfell,there is no forest. They walked through the wood,killed a few wolves and things like that until they reached he next mountains,but as they climbed,they saw an huge dwemerish Tower,they all looked up to it,there was an open Gate,right in the mountain."The home of the vampire,we should get away from it,we're lucky that it is day." "Shut up Samaru, I wonder if there is really a vampire,I decide...we kill this vampire,we'll become heroes." Monsey said proudly,but not too loud,maybe the vampire had an light sleep.
The darkness overwhelmed. There was no light,no machine worked in the dark channel,they all had been destroyed. As they got deeper into the structure the structure,they moved across a brigde. Samaru looked down and...down there were moving some skeletons,the group turned to the end of the Bridge,there stood an woman,an vampire. "Welcome to the masters home,he sent me to make sure you will keep quite,he wants to sleep.",she said with an wonderful sound of a voice,her face was bleached and nearly white,the theets were even whiter. "...so my servants are going to kill you." she added. Ri'Sirr smiled,"Good,so we don't become vampires." Tarhie moved an arrow to his bow,Samaru,Dinah and Monsey drew their swords. Ri'sirr,he took his crossbow. "aww...isn't it sweet when the kids want to defend themselves against the masters punishment." That was the last thing the vampire Lady said before she headed into the darkness,zombies and skeletons were heading from both sides of the bridge. A dozen of each. Monsey sighed,"One good thing...we don't need to fight a vampire,too...um...ok...ATTACK!" Loud yelling the group ran into the undead at the side where the vampire has had headed away. It weren't enough to stop them. They just smashed the undead before they could react. Ri'sirr and Tarhie shot the Skeletons and Zombies on the over side,then they headed to their group. In the dark there was a roaring. Three Lame Corpruses slowly walked towards them. "by Akatosh...Corprus-creatures...Tarhie,Ri'sirr...shoot 'em." Tarhie shot his Bow twice,but the Arrows didn't seem to hurt the lame cropruses really. "Damn...I hate fighting against those..." samaru sighed,then he spined with his arms an spoke a spell. He threw a mighty Fireball at the creatures an they fell to the ground. "Wow...good to have a magician with us..." meant Ri'sirr at this mess. "'kay...now we'll get the vampires."
The deep darkness of the cavern shrouded the sight of the five adventurers,but another Spell of Samaru gave them a bit of light. "Ok...for my part Vampires are Creatures of the night and of the darkness...we could defeat them outside." meant Tarhie. "We need to face him where he awaits us...Or do you want to tell your Child's a story where sun finished him?",said Dinah smiling. "N-no...I would lie to them." "Oh,this is nice to hear...you woodelves even lie to your children." Ri'sirr laughed,while Tarhie grumbled a bit. When they came into a Chamber where bright Torches where burning. On a sacrophagus sat the vampire Lady. „Oh! You came...this far? You know that there's Nothing here for you,mere mortals. I shouldn't have even thought that you' have killed his lower servants,you won't...have a chance to come to...HIM!!“ With that she jumped to the ground and drew her sword. Before the adventurers could react the vampire-lady was close to them. „Die!“ She said and jerked her sword in Dinah's Stomach,but the steel armor held most of the damage off. „Dinah!“ shouted Monsey,she drew her Sword and beat the vampire. Monsey scared up. Under the Robe was an iron Armor...Monsey stepped a metre away and watched the vampire-lady's Head coming nearer the neck of Dinah. Before the teeths could gouge into the throat,Dinah did a fast Strike through the stomach of the vampiress. He jumped forwards,so Tarhie and Ri'Sirr had a clear sight for their ranged attacks. The bolts and Arrows crushed into the armor of the female Vampire. She screamed loud and ran to the Khajiit. Before she reached him, a Firball,casted by Samaru, hit her properly and she got down to the ground. The vampiress didn't thought that this fight would be that difficult. She stood up and turned around. Her sword crossed the one of Monsey. „You mere humans cannot win against me!“ „We'll see.“ smiled monsey and gave her an hard clout, right after that,she turned around and cutted the head off.
„Only a huge speak...no great fighting. Those Vampires are so...“,said Dinah but before he could end his speech pointed him to stop. „Keep quite. This vampire said something about an...how did she call him...master?...Whatever,I'll think we should take this creature down and take some treasure,if there is kind of treasure in here.“
The group got only slowly forwards, in the following corridors were many zombies. The group fought their way through the ranks of the undead until they came into another chamber.
Samaru sat down,he couldn't even walk anymore and his arms, they were like paralyzed after all this fighting. Same for the other members. „Damn...that were many and I heard even more. Gosh,hope they won't get us like this.“ Samaru said with a small smile on his face. Monsey looked at him grimly. „Hm...we're never unprepared Samaru and...I don't think they have still enough of their brains to open a door.“ „Right,think positive...undead are dangerous,but not very clever. Hehe,exept of Vampires and all of those higher kind.“,grinned Tarhie. „We'll rest here for an half hour,after this...we'll take them down.“ Monsey ordered, „Tarhie, Sirr,how's your ammunition?“ „I only got twelve arrows...and our Cat here seems to be out of bolts. Neither he got a meelee weapon.Hehe.“ Ri'Sirr smiled. „Keep quiet,my Claws are sharper then you think.“
Monsey watched both and when she looked to Samaru. „When we go,you won't go to hand-to-hand fight, you'll support us with your magic. Dinah and I will do the fighting part...and Sirr will too. But look in every chest we'll find, maybe we gonna find some bolts in there,and for Tarhie maybe more arrows.“
The rest was really short for them,esspecially Samaru,he never had walked that much in such short time with an bonemold armor on. „After surviving this, I'll join the mage guild and go to Cyrodiil. Whole day studies and no more adventures.“ „Yeah,after this. But for now,you are working with us,that means whole day combats and small rests like that. Get up,we have some beasts to slay.“
And again they fought their they through the corridors,it was kind of easy for them,slaying those slow zombies. After all they came in a really dark corridor,even the torches didn't made a clear sight. A creaking in the darkness. They made themselves again ready for battle. „Maybe skeletons...“ A Silouette formed in the dark and then. „DAEDROTH!“ Yelled Dinah as a fireball felled him. „DINAH!“ Monsey shouted,she couldn't believe what had just happened. „Close Combat,don't let one of thus firbeballs get you!“
The rest of the group got Hand-to-Hand. The Creature was really strong and smashed Ri'sirr against a wall, nearly chopped Tarhies Head off and ripped nearly Samaru's right Arm. For Monsey's unlucky part, the creature had bitten of her left hand.
„Not looking good...“ was her comment as she bit herself in the lip. „I hate...those...daedra...“ was Tarhies comment to all this...A Plan was needed,a good plan,or they all died in that cave...
In the darkness behind them,there was Dinah...and a shadow who seemed to kiss his neck...or something else? Dinah's Skin became paled and his his eyes got red...“Come on my child. Help those mortals and get them to me,join the family of Aundae...join my family.“ The evil smile on the creatures Face began to grow. „I'll wait for you in the last Chamber of the last corridor,deep under the earth...“ The creature said as it moved into the shadows. Dinah stood up,taking his sword. „Yes. I will.“ he said grimmly and moved slowly forwards.
The creature screamed in anger and smashed Samaru to the ground. His Ironsword was broken,his armor couldn't stand another hit. The creatures jaw came fast nearer.
The Bidenhander of Dinah cracked the skull of the beast and it walked back. „You'll die for that wound,Daedra.“ He said and beat the creature again,it fell to ground and disappeared in red dust.
„Dinah? You...You are alive?“ Monsey looked at him happily. „Yep. I'm okay but there's no time to talk. We should get rid of this monster who owns this cave. Tarhie,you should get Ri'sirr out of this. You two are useless now.“ „What! Dinah,what are you saying?“ mumbered Tarhie,baling his fists. „You two are good at range. You're out of ammo and in the coming darkness we don't need you and for another point.“ „ Ri'Sirr is badly wounded, you wait for us outside,we can't risk the life of us all because one is wounded.“ added Monsey. „Okay...But end this fast.“ Said Tarhie and took the unconscious Khajiit. „Good luck.“ he said and moved through the bit of Light of the dungeon. The rest of the group began the last step of this little adventure...and at the end,maybe their last.
End of Book two
critiques and comments are allowed and gladly seen.
I think this ia very good story. I didn't want to post a grammar check, but if you want it, I'll pm it to you. The storyline is fun. But there are some issues.
For Book 1
The Tribunal gods are not Daedra. I wasn't sure if you intentionally meant the character to believe they were or if it was just a simple mistake.
I can't find any mention of the town of Oondril in cartography
The only other thing I note are the animals: wolves and bears namely. Im not sure if wolves and bears would be found in Southern Morrowind Province. Then the werewolves. I don't see why they couldn't live in the South but why not make the story a set of stories about them travelling from the far north like from Black Light. That way, you can tell more stories and the werewolves will fit in perfectly.[/b]
For Book 1
The Tribunal gods are not Daedra. I wasn't sure if you intentionally meant the character to believe they were or if it was just a simple mistake.
I can't find any mention of the town of Oondril in cartography
The only other thing I note are the animals: wolves and bears namely. Im not sure if wolves and bears would be found in Southern Morrowind Province. Then the werewolves. I don't see why they couldn't live in the South but why not make the story a set of stories about them travelling from the far north like from Black Light. That way, you can tell more stories and the werewolves will fit in perfectly.[/b]
Book 2 is good as well. I did an edit of that one as well so I'll send you both. For Book 2, maybe more references to the Dwemer ruin they're in. Since there arent many references to that fact, I constantly kept thinking they were in a cave. And I don't think using the Aundae is a good idea. The three vampires clans of Vvardenfell seem to be reclusive. Perhaps create a new clan. It's not in the lore of course but then again this is supposed to be a fictitious book, right?
*EDIT*
Now I that I have reread the stories, I have some more thoughts. I change my idea of creating a new vampire clan since there is no lore for it. But the Vampiress in the story doesn't seem to fit the criteria for an Aundae. Maybe instead she can be Berne. She seems to move and disappear alot and that makes her sneaky like a Berne, but she is also a warrior so she can be a Quarra. I also think maybe there should be a bumper story in between these two. Since they keep winding up fighting undead and horror creatures, maybe add another story in between these two about a Dwemer ghost or maybe they come upon a cave to rest and they find some old ruins and fall through into a tomb of some mummy or a dragon's den. That way, it will keep the vampire story distant from the werewolf story. As for the creatures they fight in story 1, look at the Tamriel Rebuilt screenshots for animals. All of them appear in the Data file so you can count on there presence in the game. --just some more ideas.
*EDIT*
Now I that I have reread the stories, I have some more thoughts. I change my idea of creating a new vampire clan since there is no lore for it. But the Vampiress in the story doesn't seem to fit the criteria for an Aundae. Maybe instead she can be Berne. She seems to move and disappear alot and that makes her sneaky like a Berne, but she is also a warrior so she can be a Quarra. I also think maybe there should be a bumper story in between these two. Since they keep winding up fighting undead and horror creatures, maybe add another story in between these two about a Dwemer ghost or maybe they come upon a cave to rest and they find some old ruins and fall through into a tomb of some mummy or a dragon's den. That way, it will keep the vampire story distant from the werewolf story. As for the creatures they fight in story 1, look at the Tamriel Rebuilt screenshots for animals. All of them appear in the Data file so you can count on there presence in the game. --just some more ideas.
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