Hendrix's Showcase

[hendrix29]

Hi there, this is hendrix29, and I know I've already introduced myself, but if nothing else I wish to be a TR writer. I could write quests (not make them), as well as write books. I don't know if it's okay to use released mods, like my book series, as part of my showcase but if I can I'm doing that. Also, currently I'm working on a new book mod, with over 20 books in all. However, the first book is a collection of sermons from daedric princes. Here's the file.

[hendrix29]

just want to know if I'm getting a response to this. I will have made 3-4 more books by Thursday, so if you're interested in those, I'll have them up here by then.

[Lady Nerevar]

could you post the books in just raw text in a post here? its much easier then downloading the plugin and reading them in game. it will also get you a look much faster.

[Harke the Apostle]

I review your text once you post it here. (I can't use anything either MW or OB atm).

[hendrix29]

Yes, I know grammar isn't spot on yet, and there should probably be italics and bold in some places, but I couldn't figure out how to do that in CS. Here anyway, is one book, called the Traveler's Guide to Nibenay:


A Traveler's Guide to Nibenay
by Mabrel, Explorer

Before I begin, let me tell you what a pleasure it has been to work with the late great, Arch-Mage Traven, who allowed me to use his services to my advantage in chartering the great Nibenay Valley, and how he didn't bother to care how much this expedition may have cost.

Both the Nibenay Basin and Valley are an interesting phenomenon, stretching from just south of Cheydinhal, heading southeast toward Lake Canulus, and following the north end of the Panther River into Niben Bay. This gorgeous River Valley varies in both climate, fertility, and interest, and is quite a spot for an adventurer, or explorer like myself. After taking the chances of exploring the valley for a number of years, I feel its in my best interest to share to you some excellent spots for the vacationer, the adventurer, even the merchant, as well as sharing some secrets, facts, and opinions about this great valley.

The most interesting question I have about the Nibenay Valley, as well as the large river basin is that there is so much room here for civilization to thrive, to co-exist, to farm. There are quite a few resources available here: the Valus mountains not far to the north-east, and the rivers of the Corbolo, Silverfish, and the Panther supplying an excellent irrigation source, as well as plenty of open land for setting up a town of sorts. Perhaps I'm wrong, as I don't know so much about farmland, but it seems like the Nibenay could seem like a worthwhile place of setting up some kind of town or city. The people who do live here however, exist as indifferent to each other, spending time individually, and only venturing into the towns for supplies if needed. Cropsford for example, is a commissioned farming village, but the settlement has been torn apart by warring goblins. The people here still seemed hopeful, that perhaps an adventurer could save them from these troublesome creatures.

Drakelowe, an isolated settlement directly south of the starting point for the Reed River, was quite different than the hopeful Imperials of Cropsford. Here, a witch calmly, but strongly told us to be on our way, and the expeditioners and myself simply were...on our way. The place seemed that there was something amiss, a place which an enlightened adventurer could be interested in.

Travelers along the yellow road, or fisherman among the many Nibenay rivers could easily find these next two inns as familiar locations. The Imperial Bridge Inn, ran by Publican Davela Hlaren, lies on the north bank of the Silverfish River, and just off the Yellow Road. A cheap place to stay, the Bridge Inn is nothing fancy, but offers a nice rest stop for adventurers, scholars, and mages. It also offers beautiful views of both the Imperial City, and the river at night, and at dusk/dawn. Another Inn, the Drunken Dragon offers an excellent place for food and drink, and Andreas Draconis offers a slightly nicer room for double the price of the Bridge Inn. Since it lies a bit south of the Panther River, you could be inclined to stay here if you're on a short move from Leyawiin.

As you can see, the citizens of the empire living in the Nibenay are not numerous, but do offer something in the way of services and hospitality. If you aren't looking to see people however, but wish to vacation here, or see some breathtaking sights, or even take a pilgramage to a wayshrine, there are various points of interest in the Valley.

Those who wish to see gorgeous scenery could be inspired to take a trip to Lake Canulus. Although the lake is quite far from civilization, and you may stumble against something as strong as a wolf or bear, Canulus has some breathtaking sights, and staying a night just out in the wild can be an exhilarating experience. Farther up north, close to Cheydinhal is Lake Poppod. If you're in town, and wish to take a day's trip, Poppod is a nice place to go. The lake is not vast, but does offer some nice scenery, although you may want to drift away from the daedra worshippers on the western bank.

For those interested in exploring and adventuring, Nibenay is dotted with ayelid ruins, caves, and lost forts. The most unvisited in my opinion at least, can be yours for the plundering. There are so many lost ruins, and what-not, that I'll only make a list of those of interest for the adventurer, and those are: Fort Cedrian, Fort Facian, Fort Cuptor, Malada, Wendelbek, Deserted Mine, Squandered Mine, Crayfish Cave, Lost Boy Cavern.

And last but not least, those who have taken the time to conduct a pilgramage in their devotion to the nine divines should note that there are wayshrines of both Julianos and Kynareth here. Of course, being the devout follower that you are, conducting this pilgramage should not come along with hints from myself.

I hope I could help give a background of the Nibenay Basin, perhaps persuade a few people to build one of their own homes here. All travelers in the Nibenay Basin should be noted of where they are going, and hopefully that is what this guide accomplishes.

[hendrix29]

This is my first attempt at a lore book, called Regarding Dragons in Tamriel. It is not quite finished yet, but I think it's worth showing:

Regarding Dragons in Nirn, Second Edition
by Gilsa Hlervu

Designed to give you all the information you need about the mythical dragons of Tamriel, this is an updated version of the previously biased and in-accurate report detailing that dragons throughout Tamriel did not exist. I have evidence that that is incorrect, and I'll assuredly give you a nice read on some of the least known entities to roam Tamriel.

Unlike any previous accounts, where dragons were perceived as evil, felonious beasts, this was hardly the case. Although the word "dragon" corresponds much of the time to Akatosh, they in fact are not simply part of a god's being. Dragons have helped the empire in service, as well as Akavir...for quite a few years.

Looking for a dragon? Well, it may not seem so easy especially considering that they often seclude themselves deep into mountains or deserts, and even so, when you do it may not be the most pleasant encounter. While dragons, such as the red dragon Nafaalilargus have spent quite a lot of time in endearing service to the empire, they still can be quite sensitive; especially in regards to anyone stealing their valued rewards. Nafaalilargus by the way, was sent by an Imperial Commander, Richton, to attack the crowns during 2E 864, and was paid rather handsomely. Although eventually slain, by the Redguard mercenary Cyrus, Nafaalilargus put up quite a fight, one in fact to be remembered.

Not only by the evidence of this one dragon, but by the various sightings of Dragons found in Resdayn, along with the Alik'r desert, can we conclude that dragons may still be living in Tamriel today, just very secretly. However, before you think of finding a dragon in Vvardenfell, remember that in that place, they likely have been driven out long ago.

The answer from a previous, unaccounted for source, is that the cliffracers drove these dragons out of Vvardenfell. Believe it or not, the great amount of cliffracers came upon the dragons like locusts, and the dragons were forced to move elsewhere, perhaps to northern Cyrodiil, or back to the Alik'r desert. Perhaps, even to Akavir.

Speaking of Akavir, although not many records are here from journeys to visit the Akaviri continent, we often hear Akavir as the "Dragon Land", as that is it's literal translation. Like Resdayn though, dragons in Akavir are likely extinct. Although the name corresponding to the continent is true, they seem to have perished in a war between the races Tsaesci and Po'Tun. Although this seems like a problem, this source was cited from Mysterious Akavir, and well, Mysterious Akavir simply is not the most accurate source.

Overall, we still all have some hope to see a living dragon somewhere, someplace. It is quite unlikely you'll want to see one, and even more unlikely to find one, but the intelligent creatures could likely still exist today; perhaps in places more unknown than I suggested.

[Jedak]

Its lake Poppad, not Poppod

[hendrix29]

Its lake Poppad, not Poppod

Really? Always thought it was Poppod, perhaps I should get my vision checked, heheh.

[hendrix29]

now that they are up, can anyone review them, or is that still being gone over. Sorry if I'm not so familiar with the reviewing process.

[Harke the Apostle]

If started with your first test...although I'm not quite through with that...Word's spelling corrector caught five mistakes. Fair enough.

One or two mistakes suggested that you need to do some more proof reading. For instance here you write:

This gorgeous River Valley varies in both climate, fertility, and interest, and is quite a spot for an adventurer, or explorer like myself.

Note that you use both and consequently name three things instead of two.

Sometimes you use too many words and verbs. Here for instance:

I hope I could help give a background of the Nibenay Basin, perhaps persuade a few people to build one of their own homes here.

You can also say:

I hope my information about the Nibenay Basin is helpful, and perhaps my book persuade more people to build their home there.

Then there is an important style issue:

I feel that Mabrel is using language that is more like he/she is having a speech, rather than writing an informational book. If you change that, the text improves.

Here is the most important example:

Before I begin, let me tell you what a pleasure it has been to work with the late great, Arch-Mage Traven, who allowed me to use his services to my advantage in chartering the great Nibenay Valley, and how he didn't bother to care how much this expedition may have cost.

There is nothing against opening a book with remarks like these, but try to write them in writing language.

I haven't checked the Lore.
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Now for the review. The text needs working on. You can choose to continue with this text, (just post) have the second text you posted reviewed, or write a new one.

If you want to continue with this text, think about what I've just said, and alter your text accordingly. I'll be back to review it, should you need me.

----> BTW a new text written especially for TR will get you promoted fastest!

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now that they are up, can anyone review them, or is that still being gone over. Sorry if I'm not so familiar with the reviewing process.

Thorough reviewing always takes some time (a few days). I've skipped through this and given some general pointers.
The reviewing process is much like what happens to a text that is in the Literature and Writing forums. (take a look if you can).
You write something, it is reviewed. You change it, it is reviewed again. Others give their opinion. After two or three corrections your text should be about done.

[hendrix29]

alright, I'll correct everything you said, and then some. Perhaps like you said, I'll add a book especially for TR.