File: has some werewolf dirt in it due to not selecting Bloodmoon.esm, fine otherwise.
IDs: All use the SS_ prefix, which is good. (Be sure to use the TR_ and relevant claim prefixes when you are working on actual claims et cetera)
Dialogue:
*put your greetings in Greeting 5, not 1. 1 is for super-urgent omgmypantsareonfire greetings only. 5 is average quests, which means all quests unless you've got a really good reason for your greeting not to be there (such as pants being on fire et cetera).
*You've also used only one topic for the entire quest line, which works but is, in my opinion, a bit weird. It would appear more natural if you used multiple topics.
*"Assistant" is too generic, either use a vanilla topic or a very specific one ("be my assistant", "Nzunezdt", an NPC name or whatever) so that potential dialogue conflicts are kept to a minimum.
Spelling:
*in Greeting 1 (actually 1 is indeed correct here I think, you might indeed not want a ghost complaining about a bounty on your head) "How's it like to fight an enemy in the dark! Get ready to die, Adventurer - I've been stuck in this cell for an eternity, and now it's time for you to feel my pain!"
*in assistant "Good. Now, listen. He's uncovered... ...only has three guys working..." don't use numbers, use the words.
Scripts & dialogue results:
*It's impossible to ShowMap a cell without a formal name, so that line in the assistant topic doesn't in fact do anything.
*Your SS_door2_script is broken, it checks for the strength of the door (which made me chuckle) instead of the player. Add a player-> in front of the GetStrength.
*It appears you linked the wrong door to the wrong cell (doors 1 and 2).
*door_dwrv_load00 in the Upper Levels is unlinked, so you can't get out of the cell without teleporting.
*You use SS_Excavation_Script to transist from journal 20 to 30, however, this script is never started. Use StartScript in the dialogue result box, that also removes the need for the global startexcav.
*I don't see how SS_Excavationquest 37 is to be reached.
*wow, you use an awful lot of globals! O.o
*SS_door4 also is unlinked.
Conclusion:
I like the idea of this quest, and it would have been fun to play if it wasn't broken. Your dialogue is good, low amount of errors. You show basic scripting abilities. However, the amount of global variables horrifies me. It is of course allowed to use global variables in quests, but in TR claims they should be kept to a minimum, or the list of globals will get severely cluttered. For this quest you use five (!!!!!) global variables while you could have used zero (I think). Remember to use commands like GetDeadCount and GetJournalIndex to avoid having to create global variables. Also the bit with Azura's star was funny but unnecessary, if a player is sent to trap a particular soul they should remember to drop the star themselves. I still don't see how you get to stage 37 in this quest.
So yeah, make it playable, fix the errors listed above (you can leave the errors I pointed out in Dialogue alone, boring copypaste, just do it right in your next quest) and get rid of most of (or better, all of) the globals. Cut out the Azura's Star bit, it's kind of you but unnecessary complicating. Make it so that stage 37 and 40 can actually be reached (or tell me what I did wrong
). I'm not entirely sure, but I think looking at one of Skink-In-Tree's-Shade's quests, the one with the ash ghoul, could help here, to detect if the player has the correct soul gem in his inventory.Do this and I'll be happy to recommend you!
