I wish to write a book for TR hammerfell, please review

[abbadon1100]

I have always wanted to contribute to a project such as this. However the problem is a cannot mod to save my life. So therefore i have decided the best thing to do would to be to write books for a mod. Here is a sample of my first work, a book guiding Newcomers to the province of Hammerfell. I must admit that nearly all the history has been copied from the third edition pocket guide so for my work look to chapter 2.
(Note i also wish to write books from the imperial geographical society.)


Welcome to Hammerfell: Land of the Sword
By Aebondeius Aurrus, Imperial

Chapters
1: History
2: Geography
3: Religion
4: Important things to know
5: People


CHAPTER 1:HISTORY


Hammerfell only acquired its name with the coming of the Redguards. Before then, it was called Hegathe by the Aldmer, and Deathland by the Nedic people, roughly saying the same thing. Hegathe, as a name, lives on a the name of the original Redguard capital, but into the First Era, the Nedic name began to be used by one and all to refer to the barren land north of Colovia, south of the Iliac Bay. Not that there was much reference to it historically. It was desolation, a wasteland where hot winds blew over burning rock, and the only feet that walked the sands belonged to monsters.

The elves and later the Bretons did set up outposts in what are now Sentinel and Lainlyn in order to protect their fisherfolk and seafaring merchants from the Orcs who had taken over the interior of the land. Nor were these the only dangers of record. Wind spirits, fire spirits, goblins, trolls, and scorpions the size of horses regularly crept in from the desert, and were rebuffed at the frontier, sometimes at a terrible cost.

In the year 420 of the First Era, a tribe of Dwemer arrived in the Deathlands from the east. They were of Rourken's people, rebels against the alliance of Dunmer and Dwemer in Morrowind. Settling far from the Bay, along the southern coast, they soon established an easy trading relationship with the elves to the south and Bretons to the north, and the Deathlands took the Dwemer name of Volenfell, "City of the Hammer", after the Dwemer capital whose ruins now lie buried under the sands of the Alik'r near Gilane.

The House Rourken's severing of ties with the Dwemer in Resdayn did not protect them from the results of the War of the First Council. Like the other Dwemer, the Rourken seem to have vanished suddenly from Hammerfell, leaving their wonders to the open sky. Akaviri and Nordic pirates plundered much of value from the abandoned cities, predators from the inland desert prowled the empty streets, and the harsh elements took their toll as well. By the time of the Ra Gada, over a hundred years has passed since any civilization had touched southern Volenfell.

The Yokudans left their continent following a cataclysm (discussed in a later section of the Guide), arriving in Tamriel in an invading fleet called the Ra Gada. The disorganized Orcs fell to them quickly, as did all the infestations of monster and beast further inland. The Redguards, as the Ra Gada came to be called, made no concession to the Breton settlements along the coasts, slashing through the southern Iliac Bay, winning the entire area that is now the Province of Hammerfell in only a few major battles. The Na-Totambu, the government of Yokuda, was transplanted whole, together with their traditional system of agriculture and religion which was well suited to the unforgiving climate of the Redguards' new home. The high domes, the flying dew sails, and the mosaic colophons were constructed over the old and new ruins of past civilizations.

The Redguards' slaughter of men along the coast was not quickly forgiven, and their open scorn for their neighbors did nothing to ease relations between the newcomers and the Bretons. Over a century of unrelieved hostility only came to an end at the appearance of a common enemy in the form of the Orcish kingdom of Orsinium. Following the successful alliance, the cities of Hammerfell - as Volenfell had come to be called - finally began trading with High Rock and the Colovian West, joining the battles against new foes, such as the Sload of Thras, thanks to an alliance with Bendu Olo, the King of Anvil.

Over time, Redguard society divided into two groups, depending on their allegiance to the old Yokudan ways or the new ways of Tamriel. The Crowns, who followed the traditions of the Na-Totambu, violently resisted the efforts of the Forebears, named for the original warriors of the Ra Gada, to assimilate. With the death of the Crown High King Thassad II in the 864th year of the Second Era, Hammerfell was taken by the Septim Empire, though some concessions were made following a successful revolt in Stros M'kai.

The division in Hammerfell society was not mended by joining the Empire, even to this day. In general, northern Hammerfell continued to be more traditionally Yokudan, in style, dress, and personality, and the southern lands, where the Forebears landed, tended to be more cosmopolitan; but, in truth, Hammerfell was and is a patchwork, with conflicting traditions nestled side by side. It is for this reason that Elinhir, a Crown city, did not answer the clarion call of the Forebear cities Rihad and Taneth, in the 253rd year of the 3rd Era, allowing the Camoran Usurper to continue his northward march. In return, the Forebear cities did not assist the eastern Crown cities during the War of Bend'r-Mahk against Skyrim, preferring to watch as they were overtaken by Nords.

CHAPTER 2: GEOGRAPHY

(INSERT MAP OF HAMMERFELL)

Hammerfell is a barren and rocky place, the vast Alik'r desert taking up most of it, with fertile grassland only on the coasts. As such, the major population centers are on the coastline, while the majority of the country is inhabited only by shifting sands and nomadic tribes.

If a visitor to Hammerfell is to leave by boat from Anvil the first city in Hammerfell that they will be able to land at is Chougand Rihad. One of the more Imperial cities (being so close to the border)in Chougand Rihad you are guaranteed a good bed at one of the taverns that cater for travelers. Take a your time to explore the city, with its beautiful architecture, which is like nothing you will have seen in Cyrodiil.

Following the Fertile coast round will eventually lead you to Sentinel, Capital City of Hammerfell, this is another beautiful city, where if you find the time you are quite welcome to visit me at my home, and i will show you round.

Important geographical features of the province include:
The island of Stros M'kai - Where lies the only Orrery outside of the Arcane University
The Dragontail mountains - Home of the misunderstood groups of Orcs reviled by many Bretons and Redguards.

To be continued (hopefully)

[Gnomey]

The pocket guide was written from an Imperial point of view, and was very biased to other cultures. This book was written by a Redguard, so it should certainly not be written in this view, even if the writer is a Forebear. I would suggest getting rid of the quotes around High King, and also I would suggest that you ignore some parts while adding others, like things that you might pick up from the story of Redguard on TIL. For example, one sentance:

A'tor found it impossible to stand against the superiority of the Imperial legions; many of the Crowns had deserted him after seeing the glory of the reborn Empire.

If it is a Forebear writing it, he might say that A'Tor found it impossible to stand against the superiority of the Forebears, while a crown might concentrate on rumours of Dragons being required to save the weaker Imperial forces and a cowardly arrow felling the noble prince etc. Then for the second part, the Forebear would probably get rid of "After seeing the glory of the reborn Empire" and the crown would either leave it out entirely or say the exact opposite, that "Many brave Redguards banded together that day to defend their homeland against the foreign invaders".

In general, I'd try to tell it as differently as I could. I like the idea, but at the moment it is in a completely different mood than it should be, and needs to be almost completely re-worded from the pocket guide to work. As a note, the Forebears probably feel slightly hurt and cheated with Tiber Septim's involvement. They meant to become the ruling class, so to have an ally turn on you and make itself the ruling class was very humiliating, to say the least. This would be played down, though, as the Forebears eventually recovered from the loss, but it would be interesting to feel a sort of displeased and brooding mood from the author. I hope that helps.

Right, I forgot the edit:

CHAPTER 2: GEOGRAPHY

(INSERT MAP OF HAMMERFELL)
If a visitor to Hammerfell is to leave by boat from Anvil, the first city in Hammerfell that they will be able to land at is Chougand Rihad. One of the more Imperial cities, being so close to the border, in Chougand Rihad you are guaranteed a good bed at one of the taverns that cater for travelers. Take your time (My suggestion. A while might work to but it doesn't sound right to me. ) to explore the city, with its beautiful architecture, which is like nothing you will have seen in Cyrodiil.

Important geographical features of the province include:
The island of Stros M'kai
The Dragontail mountains
Corten Mount

I'm no Lit. moderator, and don't know how you spell "Chougand", but this is what I'd change. As for the travellers, I write it with two "l"s myself, but I think that one "l" is the American spelling. I'm not sure whether you should act on this edit until a Lit. modder has given it a thumbs up or has made his own error post, though.

[Lady Nerevar]

besides the extream biast of teh first PGE, it is also now taken to be very inacurate.

[Harke the Apostle]

Other: see the stickies in the Literature Forums.

[Haplo]

Everything up there is literature, so that as a choice is sorta pointless. Fiction is a very good medium for TES, so long as it's -good- fiction.

[abbadon1100]

By Literature i meant Fiction