(Tested in Vanilla + MCP + MGEXE)

Thanks for your showcase! Nice initial work. There are some things still that need fixing.

Please take a look at the style guide here: https://wiki.project-tamriel.com/wiki/Writing_and_Dialogue_Guidelines

Notes:

• TR_m4_NPC_AlmereScript,
  • the section which moves Almere will not work as you intend. Use DaysPassed instead of Day (as DaysPassed only goes up).
  • The localdaysPassed variable will be set to 1 as soon as the quest is completed, causing Almere to disappear.
  • He will disappear within sight of the player as well, which is a no-no.
  • He doesn't need to have T_Local_NoLore
  • The formatting is incorrect for the if-statements. Make sure there is a space on either side of an operator. The equals operator needs two equals signs (==).
     
• TR_m7_Ondres_Script
  • Doesn't work. Check the condition on the if-statement, it's formatted incorrectly.
  • Even so, this script isn't necessary. Try to find a way to give the quest the same structure without using a script on Ondres.
     
• Dialogue
  • Make the initial quest dialogue more concise. It doesn't need to use two continues.
  • There is a lot of background in the claim but not all of it needs to or should go in the quest topic. The questgiver can give more information at the completion of the quest, or might offer details in unique background or my trade entries.
  • You use a single hyphen in one place ("-") for a dialogue break. Vanilla standard is to use double hyphens ("--")
  • All miscs should give the player the option to turn down the quest after hearing the offer.
  • Generally, the dialogue is well-written in TES3-consistent style
     
• Dialogue Results
  • Get rid of commas. Inconsistent usage can break commands.
  • The one where the player returns the soul gem is formatted incorrectly and won't work. Text comes before choice number, and the text needs to be in quotes.
  • The results text which adds the soul gem into Almere's inventory is also formatted incorrectly
     
• Journal
  • Make sure the journal topic "errand to Mirba" is included in the first journal entry. This makes it easier for the player to access important dialogue.

Did you test your work in-game before submitting for review? The version you uploaded doesn't work as intended for me.

The quest could also be structured a little better. Have Almere ask for the soul gem in the topic as soon as the quest is given, with the yes option gated behind the player having the gem (see the Firewatch TG quests for an example of how this is done). Put the dialogue where he advises to buy a scroll of soul trap behind the "No" option, unless the player has killed Ondres' ghost, in which case have Almere attack.

To account for Ondres being dead before the quest starts, have a dialogue option for the player in the quest intro, with the option to hand over the soul gem as well if they've already acquired it.