Exterior: Darvonis 22, -18
Shell: T_De_SetVeloth_X_House_05
Cell: Dravonis, 06 Residence
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The claim is here, it's not been transferred to me but I was directed to it after asking after a PI interior and having this suggested as a better showcase.
https://www.tamriel-rebuilt.org/claims/darvonis-6-residence
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Claim calls for a family home for some sort of fantasy desalination plant worker. I included a place to take off his work shoes with muck and salt in a bin to emphasize the caustic nature of the work, and his fishing rod nearby. He's a heavy hackle-lo smoker and drinker, reflected around the house and his room.
I envisioned one NPC on-site but a glitch prevented me from placing the book marker for her, she's a wannabe pilgrim saving up her drakes she makes spinning in the corner. Lives of the Saints is under her bed, lower of the bunks. Her brother has the top one with the netch leather shoulder.
I saw something about the original claimaint making him a widower with a child so I went with a widower with 2 kids cos the bunkbed honestly just fills the upper nook out better that a lone hammock would.
2020-12-31 14:03
2 days 5 hours ago
Name: Darvonis, 06 Residence
Clean: Yes
Esm dependencies: ok
Northmarker: Ok
Light: Ambient too high. Put it around 60
Illegal to sleep here: Yes, correct.
Gridsnap: Ok
Pathgrid: ok
Fits exterior: Yes
Floaters:
Bleeders:
Rescaled items/objects:
de_p_closet_02_empty - scaled down too much. Either rescale it to at least 0.90, or replace with a different furniture piece. Here's an example of a workable layout for the closet.
Other:
General feedback: You have good cluttering ideas. I liked many of the placements you've created, like: the hanging bottles, the dining table clutter, the eggs in the baskets (usually, people leave baskets empty, which I don't enjoy). What you need to focus on, is the configuration of the sleeping places (maybe reduce the family to two people?), and precise item placement -- some of your items do not sit flush.
Keep up the good work, and I'll recommend for promotion.
There is no fear in love. But perfect love drives out fear,
because fear has to do with punishment.
The one who fears is not made perfect in love. 1 John 4:18
2023-04-11 21:12
8 months 1 week ago
Revision 2
2023-04-11 21:12
8 months 1 week ago
Whoops it didn't attach to the other reply lmao
2020-12-31 14:03
2 days 5 hours ago
Thank you for fixing the issues! I can see that you fixed all of the bleeding and floating there was, which shows that you've learned the skill. Some additional points before we wrapp this up:
Hammock: I usually use hooks to attach the hammock rings to the walls. But the wooden spike you have is also ok. Only, its angle would cause the spike to fall rightwise, possibly collapsing the construction.
The shell: I agree that it needs to be reduced to 2x3, and sorry for not addressing it in the first review. If it would've not been a claim, we could've just wave this off, but claims demand harsher standards, because they'll go into the release. When you reduce the shell, you can save most of the clutter (you have a good amount of refs, even more than showcasers usually do).
For the bedroom I suggest two variants:
1. Put a bunk and don't worry about the avenue in front of it. Just don't place items that would be impossible to reach there.
2. Put a bed upstairs and a hammock downstairs (where Peter placed a round table in his example).
Pathgrid: do not forget to fix it when you alter your layouts. Currently, you have two instances of yellow lines colliding with furniture.
General: I can see your hard work in here. But do not stress yourself too much. You're going much faster than many of the applicants. And good work on fixing all those bleeders - very neatly done. With skills you've acquired, you'll finish this house pretty quick after adjusting the shell.
There is no fear in love. But perfect love drives out fear,
because fear has to do with punishment.
The one who fears is not made perfect in love. 1 John 4:18
2023-04-11 21:12
8 months 1 week ago
Also removed the smuggle-y nook cos there was no way to get it player accessible w/ hammock.
2023-04-11 21:12
8 months 1 week ago
Fixed a pathgrid issue.
2023-04-11 21:12
8 months 1 week ago
Fix to the Fix to the Pathgrid!
2020-12-31 14:03
2 days 5 hours ago
Replied in discord. Almost there
There is no fear in love. But perfect love drives out fear,
because fear has to do with punishment.
The one who fears is not made perfect in love. 1 John 4:18
2023-04-11 21:12
8 months 1 week ago
Here-ah we go
2020-12-31 14:03
2 days 5 hours ago
All issues fixed, recommend for promotion.
Kindly upload your latest file to the claim page, when you'll be granted the claim, and press Put up for review.
There is no fear in love. But perfect love drives out fear,
because fear has to do with punishment.
The one who fears is not made perfect in love. 1 John 4:18